I
have discovered my defects including incorrect uses of grammar, redundant words
and sentences, imprecise narrations, etc. Moreover, I cannot choose a strongly
persuasive annotation for my issue, thus I always write weakly for my position.
Otherwise, I may write the redundant explanations to sentences, thus I
repetitiously mention the same points twice, making my paper look more tedious
and seem to have less important and repetitious ideas. Moreover, I don't find
the annotations toward a specific direction, I always find them randomly.
Therefore, I cannot make my annotations be more connected and continuous. My
whole article is read scrappier in the end.
In
order to improve these drawbacks, first, I will think twice before using the
words. I will use more resources to make my word choices more precise, or ask
for others' help. Second, check the sentences and words again and again to
avoid writing them supernumerarily and making mistakes in grammar. I should
make these seemingly subtle problems occur less, and write it as perfectly as
possible.
The
matters that I mention above are relative slight and unimportant problems for
writing an expository paper. The most critical matter in the paper is
annotation. All the annotations are supporters. We should choose it wisely,
thus our article can be persuasive. My annotations are not perfect. The first
annotation didn't have certain resource on it, I don’t know surely where it
came from, and thus I couldn't cite it rightly. Also, it's not a strongly
persuasive annotation because it also mentioned the opposite position of its
view point. It stands both positive and negative position. Thus, next time when
I choose annotation, I will take a more resourceful one, then I can easily find
the source of it. Next, I will find clear annotations that support a specific
concept, thus I will not find it not persuasive enough in the article.
As
for the second annotation, I found it later that it talked about several things
that some of them are not convincing enough for people, even for me. Otherwise,
the second annotation was posted in 1998, it's far from now, thus it might not
have some updating information, concepts, and values, therefore I might not be
able to use it as an explanation to the phenomenon nowadays. Therefore, how I
can improve these flaws is to read it again and again, realizing what it really
wants to infer us, persuading myself first, and then using it. Besides, I will
also find a more recent article as annotation lest it has problems I mentioned.
In
the end, the most crucial mistake that I made in choosing annotations is that I
cannot make the annotations connective. They seem separated to each other.
Hence, next time when I am looking for the next annotations, I will think of
the former annotations first, and make the following annotations connect to the
previous annotations.
I
hope I can improve these faults in the following steps of writings, thus make
my final research paper as perfect as possible!
Here are two links for your references:
回覆刪除代理孕母的倫理與法律問題http://www.ncu.edu.tw/~phi/NRAE/newsletter/no4/01.html
國健局擬討論 代理孕母可望法制化http://tw.news.yahoo.com/%E5%9C%8B%E5%81%A5%E5%B1%80%E6%93%AC%E8%A8%8E%E8%AB%96-%E4%BB%A3%E7%90%86%E5%AD%95%E6%AF%8D%E5%8F%AF%E6%9C%9B%E6%B3%95%E5%88%B6%E5%8C%96-161127195.html